Standing on an Ice I see what lies beneath
Darkness rules the world under my burdened shoe
Lost in the sea of Misfortune where was I?
Hungry in the wilderness my thoughts won’t eat
My soul cries a tear out of a dry tissue
Suspended in fear I forgot how to fly.
My world goes Black and it seems I'm Sinking
There's a noise in my Head and I can't think straight
I reach out my hand but the Surface's too high
The light is fading and I can Breath Nothing
Coldness surrounds and Numbs my soul to a Bait
I'm falling, I'm drowning, I'm dying inside -
You know what you need? You need to concentrate on the brighter side... :-)
ReplyDeleteHe2 you're not d only one saying dat... yeah for sure... i need to rise... :)
ReplyDeleteNo u dnt.... its perfect... as for me.. make somthing for me..
ReplyDeleteWell Seth... lets see what the pen holds for us huh....
ReplyDeletemy fav..i love the deep dark feeling u get...the unknown "beneath" gives u suspense
ReplyDeleteHungry in the wilderness my thoughts won’t eat
My soul cries a tear out of a dry tissue...wow!!
Ur deep
@ Ozymandias, im very fond of this poem too... me thinks it has a lot in common with ur poems too ^.^
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ReplyDeleteThis According To Me Is By-far The Best poem I Hav Ever Read........Just Love This I Hav Kept a Copy Of This.......Is It Cool With Ya???
ReplyDeletehmmm...lemme absorb it fully like a sponge , assimilate and comment later...hmmmm
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